Giving In

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Moonjava, May 27, 2005.

  1. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    Frustration makes a nest in me
    It even gets the best of me
    Watch it take the rest of me
    I'm slowly giving in

    There's only so much I can take
    Before I start to crack and break
    I walk through the valley of another mistake
    And I'm slowly giving in

    I'll do anything to make it stop
    Anything at all
    But the faces only glare at me
    They laugh and make me fall
    And even though I feel so small
    I run into another wall
    Because I'm slowly giving in

    People leaving
    What a shame
    Other's grieving
    Life's lost game
    And only I can take the blame
    Slowly, I gave in

    BY MOONJAVA
     
  2. "†"»AMBER«

    "†"»AMBER« Member

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    awe MJ thats lovely!!
     
  3. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    merci beaucoup, madame. :D
     
  4. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Frustration makes a nest in me
    It even gets the best of me
    Watch it take the rest of me
    I'm slowly giving in

    I loved the first stanza. I liked the rest but I'm not awake enough for the rhyming I think,lol, waiting for coffee to finish brewing. I wanted to make sure I posted to this though.
     
  5. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    Thank you... those words came to me after a long bout with writer's block, and I went from there. :) It's easier once you get those first few lines out.
     
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