something i wrote

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by AlukaSun, May 22, 2005.

  1. AlukaSun

    AlukaSun Member

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    I don't really know if this is a poem or not i just wrote whatever came to mind. It's not great,i'm still working on it,this is just what i have so far. I wrote this about my nan who had cancer and just thought i'd share it.

    I have nothing left to give
    i'm all black now.
    I was pure
    now the darkness has taken over,
    the darkness that can never be erased.
    I have no purpose here
    i have nothing left to offer you or this place.

    I'm not afraid of what's to come
    it can't be any worse than what has already begun.
    Moving on from here to there
    slowly but surely like it all began.

    Slowly slowly drifting away
    floating away slipping away
    slowly slowly day by day
    slowly but surely going just like it all began.
     
  2. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    i really enjoyed reading this
    movement of words
    almost fluid on tongue.

    yet the darkness will pass
    along your days of growing
    and reaching into this world

    you will find the balance within yourself...


    lovenpeace from saff
     
  3. AlukaSun

    AlukaSun Member

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    thanks:)
     
  4. Rafaela

    Rafaela Member

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    The first stanza: Defeatist
    The Second stanza: Optimist
    The Third: Process


    ------ That's my scattered input ---- :)
     
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