My poem...created now

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Sunshine Daydreams, May 3, 2005.

  1. Sunshine Daydreams

    Sunshine Daydreams Member

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    lying in bed, you rest well
    i sit here,
    with my vodka,
    and my pot,
    and the hip forums.
    our love is like no other,
    finally good.
    I'm a fool for wanting to mess around,
    even if only for a minute.
    Luckily, that minute's passed
    and i'm still yours forever.
    maybe forever,
    what's forever?
    is forever possible?
    is it possible to want only one forever?
    deep down all i want is to drink and do drugs,
    you don't.
    that's why we're so good together
    finally someone who's not like me......
    all fucked up.
    as of now... i will not cheat.
    as of now, i'm yours only.
     
  2. paperclipart

    paperclipart Banned

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    Awww..that Is So Sweet....................cute Thang
     
  3. Lodog

    Lodog Senior Member

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    When this poem will be a couple days old, the title will lead people into a false sense of security with the hopes they've stumbled onto something new...something CREATED NOW! Only to have their hopes crushed like a slug under a shoeless foot on a warm summer night because the thread that promised them SOMETHING FRESH! SOMETHING NEW! would in all actuallity be a couple days old....not to mention being a mediocre poem at best to begin with.
     
  4. Sunshine Daydreams

    Sunshine Daydreams Member

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    whatever dude. first of all...i never claimed to be a poet...second... i wrote that in one minute....maybe two. that's what i was feeling at the moment.. do i give a shit about what anyone else thinks...no (okay well maybe... but not about this dumb poem).
     
  5. Lodog

    Lodog Senior Member

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    I know. I was just doing that to get a rise out of you. I'm bored.

    Wasn't the slug thing I said a great analogy though?
    THAT's using great imagery to get your message across!
     
  6. Sunshine Daydreams

    Sunshine Daydreams Member

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    well you did... i got all heated.. i had to take another shot! i don't know... i'm gonna take another one now.... if your bored just drink vodka...or smoke some dank herb
     
  7. Sunshine Daydreams

    Sunshine Daydreams Member

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    yeah the slug thing was pretty cool... better word usage than i used in mine.. maybe it's just because i'm fucked up
     
  8. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

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    should give more credit to people,
    (i think) they know forum-time isn’t real time.
    mucus-surfing hermaphroditic cannibalistic unipeds under foot, the feel of feelers, optical tentacles, between ones toes, reminds me of these here tapioca balls in m’bubble tea... feels gummy, tastes yummy… the shell’s the bitch.. wait, do slug have shells? Am I drinking bubble tea now or when people read this? sounds like Sunshine needs more sunshine.
     
  9. Lodog

    Lodog Senior Member

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    Damnit!


    You win.
     
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