Phil who ate to many pies and exploded

There was a boy who loved to eat pie
Whos parents said one day he would die
Phil was his name and his stomach was round
whereever there's pie this boy would be found
His mom would warn that he would soon explode
Unless his pie eating was drastically slowed
He tuned out these warnings from father and mom
But everyone knew that he was a time bomb
One quiet day when the sun had arose
He ate all the pie that his parents oppose
His body plumped up, stomach and all
His body was strewn all over the wall
WHen his parents discovered the horrible scene
They yelled and screamed "He was only 16!"
so little kids don't end up like phil
If you eat many pies you most likely will

This is a cautionary tale i had to write for my poetry class, tell me what you think

Peace and Love,
Dan

 

he he, it's cute. When I read the title I just had to read it.

 

Well done! In the humoristic tradition of Shell Silverstein or Dr. Suess prehaps. A perfect addition to any new versions of The Atkins Diet book lol.

 

Ithink its really cute. lol