Moon Between the Mountains

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by LenaSilk, Jan 26, 2026.

  1. LenaSilk

    LenaSilk Nutted

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    In fives and tens we're counting time
    That never seems to toe the line
    Where should we go from here?
    Climbing walls of forged veneer
    Can’t see the moon from here

    Up one mountain, chase another
    Nothing waits to be discovered
    I wonder why we even try
    We can't expect to get it right
    Until the moon reveals the night

    Licking wounds time can't erase
    We'll disappear without a trace
    And in the shadows we'll be safe....

    Tonight we'll find where we belong
    In every note of a moonlit song
    Forget what's right, rewrite the wrong
    And then we'll know where we belong
    We'll know where we belong

    I look at you, I hear your voice
    And know I need no other choice
    I ache to touch your shining face
    And kiss your lips, my healing grace,
    As the moonlight finds its place

    Licking wounds time can't erase
    We'll disappear without a trace
    And in the shadows we'll be safe...
    In the shadows we'll be safe


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    18-6-2013
     
  2. Ybcican

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    WOW…you wrote that in 2013. It’s a timeless work of beauty!
     
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  3. Moon Goddess

    Moon Goddess I am an enigma unto myself Lifetime Supporter

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    That is beautiful. I am going through something right now and this really resonated with me. Thank you.
     
  4. LenaSilk

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    Thank you Moon Goddess! I really hope it can help in some way....?

    Yes YBican 2013, though a word or 2 are different here and there. I wrote so much back then, for about 3 years because my life had become so rich so quickly, but I don't even know where the words came from.
     
  5. sureño

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    I also like writing poetry, but I couldn't do it in English. It only comes out in my native language.
     
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  6. 6Sailor9

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    Give it a try and interpret if possible!
     
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  7. sureño

    sureño Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    It's not the same, because when you translate it, it loses the original rhyme.
     
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  8. 6Sailor9

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    :-/
     
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  9. LenaSilk

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    Yeah that can be really hard to do. Poetry often needs to be rewritten some to make it sound as good as the original.
     
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  10. sureño

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    That's right. I have heard some songs translated into Spanish, but in reality, they have been rewritten. Sometimes they have used creativity to even maintain the rhyme in the other language, but in few cases. For example, in the saying that goes:" an apple a day keeps the doctor away."
    Someone translated it: " una manzana al día mantiene al doctor en la lejanía"(day/away = día/lejanía)
     
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  11. viking_

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    Beautiful words and poetry Lena
    I love reading people’s words, seeing what’s in there mind, see how there mind ticks, feeling what they are going through or what they want
    words are so powerful

    thank you for sharing
     
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    You're welcome and than you for reading and commenting!
     
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