How do you break this awful curse always feeling the need to eat human beings just the taste of them makes me excited but i dont want to become this monster anymore i need to find a cure from this disease thats slowly eating at me...giving me unwanted desires I try not giving into these cravings of mine but they get so out of control that i give in Drinking in the lovely warm blood tasting the flesh inside my mouth Just thinking about it makes me crave more and more oh please tell me how i can get rid of this desire I just want to be a human again to love someone...to cheerish them Yet im infected with this disease and theres no cure to take back this slow eating disease....which consumes my mind and soul each little baby step i take.... consuming me to the dark side Feeling it turn everything inside of me black as sulfur making everything burn to bits....leaving me feel empty inside not wanting any desire yet the nice warm blood and flesh of humans that takes me over the edge...wanting to suck the life out of someone makes me very excited and wanted to do it more and more each and everyday....but i hold back on my cravings thinking im still human in this body but the more i hold back the more the craving comes and my dead mind takes over and makes me eat some helpless human....letting them become just like me a zombie who is mixed up in my own mind and cant change anything for the world. please tell me if there needs to correcting to this poem. thanks ashley
Hi ashley, welcome to the forums...there were parts of this poem i liked, the concept was good, it was a but too explanitory for me though, but i'm an images person.... can i make a small comment, though, i dont want to sound rude, but if you're going to be posting several poems, you might want to consider starting one thread with all of your works as some of us have done, or maybe just space your posts out more. that way you dont have 8 seperate threads on the page (which pushes 8 posts of others' off the page). this way, anyone who wants to read your poems can find them in one place, and other poet's works have a chance to be seen on the front page as well. just so everyone has a fair chance to have their poems noticed. keep writing though, and have fun in the forums!
hey. thanks for the comment. Sorry about that im still kinda new but ill keep that in mind. Thanks again ashhy
:^) Yeah. That piece does have that effect. When I first started reading it I wasn't sure to what extent it might have been intended literally!
giggles. Hmm does it really seem like im a zombie? giggles some more...i guess i did my job on this poem then. I wanted to write a poem on zombie thoughts and this is what came to mind. Guess im getting too good for gory stuff. But im definetly not a zombie...hehe im more of a tiger instead. Thanks for the comment. Ashhy
Yer welcome. :^) I don't know if I fancied ye a zombie so much as someone perhaps compelled by zombie-like, um, well, err... URGES! You know. Brain eating and all. The usual stuff. I think goth is pretty cool by the way.
Giggles.I dont have the zombie-like cravings like eating brains and stuff i just put it in the poem cuz thats what zombies do and wanted to capture zombies thoughts perfectly. Anyways thats what zombies do eat people and decided to put that in the poem. I think im a zombie just cuz i dont feel all here at times but i definetly dont have the cravings. Giggles some more. Oh cool thanks.... yes i love being gothic and love being myself. Thanks for the comment Ashhy
You're welcome, Ashhy! Good job on the poem then, obviously! I could be classified as goth myself as much as anything. (I write including some dark stuff and make some weird art.), and my last girlfriend was goth.
yea im gothic cuz of my poetry music and what i wear. But i love being me. thanks for the comment. Ashhy
