Look into the eyes what do you see When you look out, how come when we look back in things are so different Speak your mind please I want to hear what you have to say to me Good or bad doesn'y really matter Cause I hate you anyway So don't even try to get away Now my day is ruined This better not be my last You were here in the past Now it's present and you're gone You are done and now you're none Look into the eyes what do you see Nothing, cause your gone
I can feel the passion behind the words in this, and while I don't really like rhyming poems too much, this one doesn't seem too terribly forced, imo, so good job there. Just as a friendly observation, there seems to be a story between the lines... if you put some details in, I think it'd really crank this up a notch or two. Regardless, thanks for sharing
