WRITE FUN RIGHT NOW (a children's poem to promote writing) I write when I am cheerful. I write when I am sad. I’ll write a whole earful of something really bad. I think about what to write on days I feel alone, when not a friend’s in sight, I’ll pretend they’re on the phone. I can talk to Mary Sue And write to say, “What’s shakin’?” or Billy Bob Franky Lou eating eggs and bacon. On the days I’m feeling blue, I get a pen and paper and watch the words stick like glue or puff a smoky vapor. I can see people forming, characters come alive, like actresses performing when the crowds all arrive. I write about anything, like animals at the zoo, and watch the monkeys swing, while doing a flip or two. I write a singer on stage ready to do his songs, dancing around inside a cage, as people sing along. My thoughts can run wild when I write, I let loose, like a carefree child playing duck duck goose. I can be something real small, like ants crawling on trees, or a giraffe, lighthouse tall, or little bumblebees. Or sail the ocean and back underwater or on boats while I eat a healthy snack like cake and ice cream floats. I can be sharks or dolphins swimming in the deep blue sea, and have wings instead of fins. Everything, I can be. I also like to travel to outer space, beyond to walk on the moon’s gravel trying to find a pond. Some days I write a story. Some days I write a poem about a girl named Tori brushing her teeth with a comb. I write what’s on my mind, whatever it may be. I write to try and find the person inside of me. My pen is like a wand writing a magic show. I find it very fond to see the words glow. And paper is like treasure washed along the shoreline. It really is a pleasure to know I wrote was mine. So if you’re bored like me not knowing what to do a pen and paper might be just the right thing for you. It really is that easy. Just write a word to start. Even if it’s cheesy, just write with all your heart.
I liked it, Seems a nice happy poem. Only downside for me was it's length, But i've never personally liked long poems. Chev,
Hey Chev, glad you liked it. As for the length I thought it could be a picture book idea, that's why the length. Sorry I didn't mention that before. Thanks again
I could imagine it in a little childrens book accompanied by some childrens drawings maybe. Keep up the good work
Just to be the sole voice of criticism, I would seriously work on trying to keep the metre constant. The first bunch of stanzas are pretty consistent, then it's just all over the place.
I liked it... I'm not a true poet and don't understand "Zorba The Grape"'s comments, but if I had a child, I would only wish I could find a book like this to read them.
