With Lucid Visions of A Garden (In Technicolor)

I will sail full throttle

On a broken ship inside a bottle

Wisps of smog and smoke come from the caudal

Darkness is the only sound I hear



A sea of red circles emanate all of their love

Telling me that I’m truly a part of

Their laughing-time games and rides above

Kill my pain and take away my fear



Chariots of silver and stallions of gold

In purple nights of new and orange days of old

On ice-blue waves what’s to behold

Warming myself in the snow



In the misty summer showers

I see the green plastic flowers

And for a thousand hours

I sit and watch them grow



With lucid visions of a garden

I try and beg the maiden’s pardon

As the sky above me hardens

I see her fingertips glow



I dance around the yellow sun

I look round for people to share my fun

And when I see that there is none,

I then sit down and cry



But when I get back down to earth

I witness my own death and rebirth

And so I run along the narrow firth

And never again wonder why



I never before seen the light

Shine so brightly than on this night

So I take it in with all my might

That this all is really real



My eyes have been lifted from the veil

With truth of color without lies of pale

And so this is the end of my tale

But the beginning is all I feel

 

This is a great warning "YOU SHALL NOT PETITION THE LORD, WITH PRAYER...!"

Luvley stuff.

 

this is awesome

but i just feel like it stops suddenly, and is therefore unfinished

i want to keep reading but it just stops

 

Yea, it kinda leaves us hanging. But the good news is that we are left WANTING more. Good work.

 

i also really love that rhyme scheme

 

Glad you liked it! I can write more if you want.

 

sweet!

 

yes i totally want to hear more, this is just gorgeous

 

there. I believe that's a proper ending. You've all given me reasons to write more. Thank you kindly, my perpetual muses

 

beautiful, but at the end should that be "tale" instead of "tail?"

 

oops! That kinda changes the meaning a bit, doesn't it? hahah. There, it's changed. Glad you liked it, man