what so you guys think of this poem?

Can I ask you something?
It’s rather important,
It has to do with us,
Well,
We both like each other,
So what stopping us,
From being together?
I think it’s because we’re both shy,
Or maybe,
We don’t want to have to deal with all the comments,
The stares,
The remarks,
Maybe even the laughs,
But I really don’t care what others think,
All I know,
Is that I want to be with you,
And me being to shy,
To ask you this in person,
This is my way to ask,
Will you go out with me?

 

my main points are
it's "too shy", not "to shy"
you don't need to put a comma,
at the end of every line
and perhaps it should be your "way of asking"
not your "way to ask"
but apart from that
i like its simplicity
since it's such a simple
and sincere
idea
making it more complex
would be melodramatic

 

i think its rather dull.

 

I't certainly no more dull than most other things around here