well now

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by FREE, May 31, 2004.

  1. FREE

    FREE Member

    i aint much of a writer in my own mind man but this is something i wrote about a year ago.

    "war"
    two great nations of pure willed
    anchient fathers
    of man
    in violent uproar
    killing themselves
    their slaves
    their people
    ripping out hearts
    to permiate a deities home with
    insence of the guilty blood
    the pain of a sharp shard
    sending existence to euphoria
    a free newly born spirit
    we praise thee
    our enemy
    and also as
    our keeper

    i wrote this in remeberace of my indian backround thats my inspiration for my thoughts.think i got what it takes man?
     
  2. veinglory

    veinglory Member

    I think that before saying much more Iwould have to correct the numerous spelling errors, but doing so sometimes pisses people off. Do you want to see that sort of correction?
     
  3. FREE

    FREE Member

    nope
    good enough
    i quit
    hehehe
     

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