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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Fairlight, Apr 18, 2013.

  1. Fairlight

    Fairlight Banned

    Water is a burnt substance
    And time is dry
    Like gin and roses in a wet cardboard box
    I hate it when you cry.
    I could love you
    If I let myself fall
    Into your cool.Grey.Eyes.
    But they are as empty
    As honest little lies
    A picture cell of truth
    Resides only at our outer edges
    As you modify me into a more manageable impression.
    I am tired of being someone else -
    Not for you,but for myself
    I would like to shake the cinnamon dust
    Out of your hair,so fine and red
    I would like to blow some intelligence
    Into your stupid,pretty little head
    Are you not aware of the perverse implantation
    That makes me do the things I do
    When I love you
    Do you not know that I am an obsessional neurotic
    With everything that that implies
    And that besides tenderness lies cruelty
    The most honest of alibis?
    Water is a burnt substance
    And time is dry
    Like gin and roses in a wet cardboard box
    I hate it when you cry.
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  2. natural philosophy

    natural philosophy bitchass sexual chocolate

    your poetry is bad
  3. Fairlight

    Fairlight Banned

    Thanks.I presume you mean "Bad" as in awful and not "Bad" as in "Good".Yes I'm awful,but I'm I'm having a great time.
  4. Mr. Bleak

    Mr. Bleak Member

    A bit harsh natural philosophy...

    Keep writing Fairlight
  5. Meliai

    Meliai Banned

    I like this, I meant to comment when you first posted it but I didn't for whatever reason and never came back to it

    keep writing, this isn't bad at all. I've read some bad poetry on HF lol and this doesn't come close
  6. RainyDayHype

    RainyDayHype flower power Lifetime Supporter

    Short, sweet, and honest.. makes for a beautiful poem
  7. AceK

    AceK Scientia Potentia Est

    She means badass bro, it may not be the smoothest verses but it'll get u recognized;). You on that dust too yo, dats ill as shit!
  8. Fairlight

    Fairlight Banned

    Thanks Acek.But i wrote that poem months ago.Rainy bumped it for me.
  9. RainyDayHype

    RainyDayHype flower power Lifetime Supporter

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W6mr8p40ZxM"]Bringing Down The House - I got this outfit from yo mama - YouTube

    GLENGLEN Lifetime Supporter

    5 Days Short Of 12 Months Ago To Be Exact...:)

    Cheers Glen.

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