typewriter poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by inbloom, Jun 20, 2006.

  1. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    hmmm....hummm....thinking and humming and buzzing....what is this?​
    a form of paranoia, or just a machine? what?​
    a machine.​
    click, click, click, wrrrr, bzzzzz, aaaaah.....unnatural thought.​
    a waiting period of about and hour and 15 minutes. so what?​
    conversations i had with an electric girl. for some​
    reason, i'm terrified, amazed, and glad. just one more​
    free mind, floatin about the breeze like a leaf....groovy.​
    oh, leaves and branches cling to sticky summer sweat-drenched evening. yes.​
    couldn't we just be the REM induced dream of some other mind?​
    wet with sweat and the terrible cramps​
    that winos get...am i unnerved? maybe.​
    am i insane? most likely.​
    am...i...real?​
    vaguely.​
     
  2. Biida

    Biida Member

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    There's some crazy rhythm to that, man, and it makes me want to dance!

    Very shibby.
     
  3. Bonsai

    Bonsai Member

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    vibrant poem, lured by the title, I enjoyed your write!
     
  4. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    Thanks, you guys! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)
     
  5. indian~summer

    indian~summer yo ho & a bottle of yum

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    i love the rhythm in this
    really, really good :D
     
  6. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    Thanks! :D
     
  7. janedoe

    janedoe Member

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    dreamy :)
     
  8. Apples+Oranjes

    Apples+Oranjes Bekkasaur

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    I love love love this one, James. One of my favorite newer works of you by far. Fast paced, and exciting... LOVE IT.
     
  9. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    Thank yah, lovely. :D
     

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