The True story fo Jack and Jill

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by iscreamchocolate, Aug 26, 2005.

  1. iscreamchocolate

    iscreamchocolate Senior Member

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    Here is a poem I wrote for english in grade 9 :):) haha.. The teacher was a little terrified. which also led to a parent-teacher confrence

    The True Story of Jack and Jill
    By Damaya
    (Grade 9)
    (wrote for english class)

    Jack and Jill blew up the hill
    Jack and Jill had a great thrill
    As Jack tumbled over and over
    He fell down and broke his shoulder
    Jill ran down to Jack
    Gave him a great big SMACK
    Jack began to slaughter
    That poor worthless daughter
    Jill sprang up and grabbed that pail of water
    Smacked and hit him black and blue
    He looked as if he hadn’t a clue
    Jack tried to declare peace
    Jill would only laugh and tease
    Cinderella came walking by
    She thought she would at least try
    She took that gruesome Jill
    Shoved her upon a hot grill
    She added some sauce
    And without much loss
    Ate her up
    Until she fit in a cup!
  2. EmyleeShadow04

    EmyleeShadow04 Member

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    how about this... ?

    Jack and Jill went up the hill
    To smoke a little leaf
    Jack got high and opened his fly
    and Jill said where's the beef?

    I didn't write that.

    Your poem doesn't flow very well, but I do like it. It's amusing. :) Keep it up. :D Writing is the best outlet. I've written poems about things I didn't even realize I was dwelling upon. It's scary really... what we think about without realizing.

    Anyway, thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading your poem.


  3. iscreamchocolate

    iscreamchocolate Senior Member

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    well it was a poem I wrote in grade 9.. haha.. I have gotten much better since that one. :p glad you liked it.

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