Most of you have probably read this before, I'm just reposting it from the old forums for anyone who hasn't. I've changed it slightly too. I'd love to hear any comments you might have to improve it. I've recently entered it into a competition, so fingers crossed.... The Shepherd And His Flock When the far-flung places of this world Beckon thee with freedom’s finger, To embrace the open arms of strife; Fear not morality’s misgivings, but Clench thy rifle in thine hand, clench thy fist of might And take solace… For the Lord is thy shepherd. When His chosen people find their way To Zion’s hill, let them not fear loss, But let them build a golden wall; Pave the streets so, and let all beyond Wither and decay. Ask not why it must be so, For the Lord is thy shepherd, And to pasture thou must go. When the stars fall from the twilight sky, When the sun abstains her morning duty, And when the Earth itself doth heaving sigh; Think not upon the atom bomb Obliterating innocence; Nor nature’s spirit felled to build it, Her bounty reaped, pillaged, burnt and raped: For we preach His good name, Question not ours… The Lord is thy shepherd. And thou art sheep!
lol it doesnt need improvement! i have a strange desire to go "baaaaaaaah" tho hmm i shall go take my medication now...
I like it quite a lot. I love the use of 'old' words in it, and effect they cause. It kind of reminds me of that song i've just been listening to (Rage Against The Machine:"now you do what they told ya, now you do what they told ya"*
