The Kid Who Wanted To Beat Down The Stars

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by borut16, May 30, 2004.

  1. borut16

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    Stars were out that night

    The Moon was set for Fairy's dance

    And some kid wished he was a knight.

    Wish upon a Star…

    Was that the night of chance,

    For him to get his own magic tale

    And his own house made of rance?

    Wish upon a Star…

    He got his dress, he got his horse

    But he wanted more;

    He wanted to own the Stars,

    To have command over others' course.

    (He wanted all the wishes upon the stars to be under his command)

    He tried to beat the Stars down

    But his sword was too short

    So he cried, cried out loud:

    'Stars please come down, with thy proper noun!'

    Stars came to his lawn,

    Gave him a cuddle

    And dissapered.

    The kid smiled and realized

    That sword is too short with a reason;

    So that people don't beat down each other's wishes…

    So that people don't destroy each other's hopes…

    No Hope = No Earth

    No Earth = Death

    (no hope = human + a sword long enough to beat down the stars = death)

    Stop the wars.

    Stop the Death
    The Death.
    The Death.
    The Death.
    The Death.
    The War.
  2. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

    Hey Borut this is great, I think you lose it towards the end but it's an important message told in a childlike and beautiful manner. Can't believe no-one else has commented....

  3. borut16

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    thank you for your comment. I was just trying to imitate the poet I'm reading at the moment by the end, and it was my first try to do so, that's why it's not too good towards the end, I think.
    But practice makes perfect they say. ;) So thankies for your nice comment.

  4. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

    I gave it stars

    1) cos it's about stars
    2) cos it's good

  5. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

    wow, yes, that is very good!

    good people need only a swiss army knife.
  6. borut16

    borut16 Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

    Hhee, that sounded funny in some way, thanks. :)

    Swiss army knives are very useful anyway, for various stuff outdoors.

    Thanks for your comment. :)
  7. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

    we should all go outdoors, with our swiss army knives, avoid the city... I know I'm a happy camper, above whom the stars beat, when i'm out there.

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