The air is cut with cyanide

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by HawkinsOrchestra, Jan 9, 2008.

  1. HawkinsOrchestra

    HawkinsOrchestra Member

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    I’m sick of people who don’t listen

    And I’m fucking sick of oxygen

    Give us this day our daily bread

    The land of freedom has been forced

    And fixed in your head

    Carcinogens are American

    I smoke a forest of crackling trees

    Trees that wish they could talk

    Whispering warnings across the breeze

    And still undead

     
  2. Malapascua

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    I think you have a lot of thought happening all at once.

    I think it needs something to pull it all together.
     
  3. HawkinsOrchestra

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    you are so right lol.. ive been stressed lately, and smoking a lot.
     
  4. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Immature and lacking physical talent
    Why hide from love?
    “You’re just saying that”
    But
    “Do you want to be my everything?”
    Contradict yourself
    And
    Fuck yea I do
     
  5. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Notoriously swinging
    And somehow you become caught
    Between my teeth
    Each time you see my tongue
    Mouth wide open
    I am a trampoline and you are a child
    Bouncing each day
    Tirelessly
     
  6. HawkinsOrchestra

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    West ablaze
    They fall harder than the others
    I see the orange waves
    Flickering sharply in your eyes
    A blunt shadow on your face
    And the hunger
    Something fierce
    Walking on your hands
    Watching in disgust
    Pacing is a Bengal
    Waiting for the moment
    To end my life
    I know it
     
  7. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Witnessing beginnings
    Coming from endings
    Grimly
    Why does death bow before me?
    Self-Actualization means nothing
    Impossibility is no factor in the game I play
    Winning
    She says, “Tonight will be the night.”
    Bowing before me I witness her die
    I have done it before
    I will do it again
    Not disappearance
    Nor the end of life
    Metaphysical
    “The last thing you will realize, my son.”
    I do not pity you
    This is for me
    “What you need is what you’ve already got.”
     
  8. The Instinct

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    I like them all, good job on releasing. Cosmonaut and The Air Is Cut With Cyanide stuck out most to me.
     
  9. HawkinsOrchestra

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    =] thank you. i wrote all of these back to back on an angry day.
     
  10. Major Peacenik

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    This stuff is great. "Forest Fire" rules.
     
  11. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    I like the first one. It took me a couple of reads. In fact, I've read it every day since you posted. The anger is very apparent

    But 'Forest Fire' is the one. It's so blunt. I really enjoyed it.

    I smoke a forest of crackling trees
    Trees that wish they could talk
    Whispering warnings across the breeze


    This part really got me. I will be calling back here again.
    Peace,
    A.
     
  12. HawkinsOrchestra

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    thanks both of you. =] -hope you come back. bless you
     
  13. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Air to breathe
    Rivers to bridge
    In hearts that love falsely
    Intending to live
    When collisions occur
    Antagonists and heroes
    Never give
    High Low High
    High High Low
    Low Mid High
    Sounds right at the moment and
    Leads a perfect life
    Cautiously forgetting all the bidding sworn
    Calmly gazing at an amazing storm
    Changing to learn to move onward
    Learning in order to know
    Few come and never go
     
  14. HawkinsOrchestra

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    I hold true to myself that no matter what happens
    I will always be fascinated by the lewd schoolyard bully bunch
    They magnify prowess stupidly
    Receiving naïve young beauties
    While we watch wisdom unmatched
    Skeptic, playing teatherball together
    Unknowingly we push further than they
    Willing to defy and redeem our jealousy
    Sometimes our own moves across the border
    One day they will run backward
    Begging for our acceptance
    Fools fall while we, being wise,
    Forgive.
     
  15. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Am I wasting my time?
    You are a fool. You hide.
    You’re set on matter over mind
    And I can only help you to help yourself


    You are starving yourself
    And I can’t always be there to force it down your throat.
    Do I have to scream in your face?
    Restrain your body with chains?

    I can’t do this alone
    You laugh silently on the phone
    How do I know
    You’re not just being sarcastic?

    You are a winner at this game
    I assure you however, I am a contender
    And I can keep the beast tame

    I am not a slave
    I will not stand for this much longer
    Open your eyes and see that I am human
    I can make you stronger
    I won’t let your habits defeat me

    You’re the type of person
    That would sit on a stranger’s lap
    In my presence
    Just to make me jealous
    To see if I’m your lapdog
    I am not and will do the same to you
    Repeating your actions


    You are pretty and no one will say you are not
    So why do you starve yourself
    As if you want to die?

    You prop against the bathroom doorframe
    "Mirror, Mirror, On the wall"
    Thoughts running through your head faster than you can comprehend
    Like it's where you want to be
     
  16. HawkinsOrchestra

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    and red, i love your feedback. that is the best feedback i have recieved, and your posting of that part of "The Air is Cut with Cyanide" really made me athink about my own poetry, and i do love that part a lot. i also love "and still undead" -i have read your poetry and would like to know, where are you and what are you doing? from what i have read it sounds every humanitarian and fulfilling.
     
  17. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    I'm in Thailand, a volunteer teacher at a rural school. I;ve been here for 18 months and will probably be here for another year or so.

    Peace,
    A.
     
  18. HawkinsOrchestra

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    I imagine you as not a father, or mother, son, or even the undelivered sister.
    Only possibility,
    A deadly gaseous poison, unseen, unscented, and unfelt.
    Going all in on creation without checking your cards,
    Blindly playing your hand
    Watching worlds unfold without gates to keep or shun
    Knowing the secret of death is that once our vessel is gone
    We just won’t care.

     
  19. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Love is a four letter lie
    And it’s twinging me between the eyes
    There are some nights when I can’t fall asleep
    And don’t want to wake up alive
    Love is a four letter wonder
    Your drowning me
    Pulling me under
    Blacker than blue because I’m so deep
    Farther than any man will plunder
    You are a letter I carry at all times
    Folded up and pressed against the crevices of
    My hollow chest
    Where I used to keep
    My heart

     
  20. HawkinsOrchestra

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    Is life not loved for it’s simple pleasures?
    I am a revolutionist born in a time period of followers
    I want blood
    I want to stab with a sheathed sword
    Without fear of isolation in a pitch black cell
    I want to fight to the death, and win.
    I want to let out all the aggression I’ve been holding back
    Since I started making my own rules
    I want to assassinate political figures,
    Slur the lines of reality
    Take a life, Save a life,
    And end useless heartache
    I am the son of a bloodthirsty taking line
    Jumping rooftop to rooftop
    To hone in on a silent kill
    Mercifully I wait in agony
    To rest
     

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