tell me what you think...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by lilylove, Jun 7, 2005.

  1. lilylove

    lilylove Member

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    Everyone is leaps and bounds ahead of my writing, but I had an experinece last night that made me feel really helpless and I decided to write about it. If you have any comments please dish it out.​

    all I can do is pray...​

    you cannot verbalize a persons' worth​
    it is hard to convince another what you do not believe​
    simplicities: it will be okay, this is what to do​
    follow my faultering lead​
    the blind leading the blind​

    he seeks in dark places for the blissful numb​
    he checks behind his grandmother's art for familiarity​
    he itches his arms and lays his head low​

    I will hold him​
    I will whisper​
    and I will cry as I realize I have to leave​
    being lonely is being lost in your head​
    and your mind can be a scary place​

    at this point all I can do is pray​
    and have hope that the sun will return and bring him with her​
     
  2. Zion

    Zion Member

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    Good depicction of campanionship and our nature of searching. Brings out the bright optism of companionship. Good start. and Good day
     
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