sun

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by standingdeer, Jan 2, 2005.

  1. standingdeer

    standingdeer Member

    Please
    lift the veil of this day for me
    I wish to see the sun
    feel warmth upon my face as I wash my hands in a cold ocean
    ravens laugh through the walls of the house
    as I sit steeping tea
    deepening the meaning of my sadness
    with the madness of laughter

    Music is my only hope
    so I listen to the same song

    Written words, falling water
    stones become priceless
    scattered through out the world
    like hearts in our chests
    Trying to entice motion
    a sentiment of emotion

    Blessings
    Standingdeer
     
  2. amber

    amber Member

    Beautiful... kinda reminds me of how I'm feeling now~~ I love your poetry
     
  3. AshtonsMom

    AshtonsMom Banned

    I can almost feel the rhythym in this one.
     
  4. tigerlily

    tigerlily proud mama

    i really like this part... madness, craziness, depression, you give some great imagery


    these two lines are just a bit awkward to me.. the similarity of the words motion and emotion are difficult for me to read
     

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