subtle dominance

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by serra, Jul 16, 2004.

  1. serra

    serra tentacle girl

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    hey everyone
    i used to write a lot but havent much until recently. just wrote this one a few hours ago, let me know whatcha think?

    subtle d o m i n a n c e

    empty apartment, nothing left
    but memories and carpet scars,
    stains where i spilt
    my soul to yours

    white light refracting echoes of e n d l e s s hours
    spent

    basking in the glow

    of your early morning gaze as
    i would crawl
    into bed and you

    g r e e d i l y pull me closer as i was your missing

    POSESSiON

    no longer posessed

    a cool, softly conditioned hum keeps me company as i wait
    alone
    in our now vacated empty life together
    [soon they come and take away the keys]
    because i am finally finished with your

    soft and selfish

    subtle dominance.










    if you want to see it with pretty colours and formatting...
    http://www.livejournal.com/users/aqua_zara/2004/07/16/

    :) peas, serra
     
  2. serra

    serra tentacle girl

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    awwww.... nothing. *cries*
     
  3. SkaBegonia

    SkaBegonia Member

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    Actually reminds me a little of E. E Cummings...I enjoyed.
     
  4. serra

    serra tentacle girl

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    thanks! =)
     

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