subjugation, assimilation, individuation...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TundraLotus, Aug 16, 2005.

  1. TundraLotus

    TundraLotus Member

    familliarity with
    the archetypes of trauma
    licking at the primal wound
    vigilant and gaurded
    glaring my teeth.
    lash again, lash again
    temporally resigned to this
    submission self imposed

    for all too long the cauldren boiled
    turbulence inverting on itself
    an inner world of fantasy
    to replace the unbearable
    protect and hide away, the personal spirit
    from small self's self destruction
    within those fatal breathing spirals,
    no stratification could occur
    no solace in blindly fueling wraths

    ripping tendrils of attachment
    fire still burns
    cauldren still mixes
    but there is a stone suspended
    by an unseen force
    sphereical quadrantized tertiary pentagramic
    geodisic heart
    approximate perfection, precise
    half light, half dark
    irridescent full spectrum consciousness

    words spill "well..."
    boom like thunder rolling on the horizon
    this substance of today, i am
    will be whittled on again
    exposed to ultra violet catastrophe
    the paths of my past
    act as teachers
    feathers on a duck's back
    shedding caustic fluids
    make them bead like water

    new matters will concrescence
    just being
    exerting their purifying presence
    the present
    to try to inhale all senses of Mother's tongue
    i get a billion selfs, per diamond vehicle
    less miles found in a gallons
    when saught, speak, until then
    speak the sound that orchids make--
    an old man once said
    "i like to create emotion!"
    in affect, bonding, a cosmic unity caulk is found
     
  2. EternalHunter

    EternalHunter Member

    "but there is a stone suspended
    by an unseen force
    sphereical, quadrantized, tertiary, pentagramic
    geodisic heart
    approximate perfection, precise
    half light, half dark"

    speak the sound that orchids make--
    an old man once said
    "i like to create emotion!"
    in affect, bonding, a cosmic unity caulk is found"

    These bits are absolutely perfect! I just have one question. You started off using very little, if any, punctuation, but in the last two stanzas there are ubiquitous commas etc. I realize why you chose not to use periods, but what did you intend by the rest?

    Peace
     
  3. TundraLotus

    TundraLotus Member

    wish i could give you an explanation, but there is none, cept to maybe pause a few of the things i wanted to communicate, or just use the words i did, without having to use any modifiers between them to show they go together.

    glad you enjoyed
     
  4. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

    Man, what a ride you took me on. Groovy poem man!
     
  5. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    Been a long time, my friend... love to see your current work!

    Condensed and super-potent... thank you for all your poetic offerings. :)
     
  6. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    4th verse I especially like.
    good stuff! :]
     
  7. Miss_Beatle

    Miss_Beatle Beatlemaniac

    I really liked it :)
     
  8. speechless homie..im jelious.
     

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