stutter (march 05)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by pancreatic_insanity, Aug 15, 2005.

  1. pancreatic_insanity

    pancreatic_insanity Member

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    tell the world off
    in one stutter,
    amazing,
    the art
    of deception.
    take one word
    and stretch it out,
    the problems
    of communication.
    take as long as you want
    to get your point across.
    maybe people will listen harder,
    write a story
    to fill a page
    fill the air with stutters.
    -danei
     
  2. monarch

    monarch Member

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    i thought it was alright. i liked the last line, 'fill the air with stutters,' it brought the whole poem together for me =)
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Kinda choppy, but I get the feeling it's intentional, so it's alright. I agree, the last line really closes it well. I like what you're saying there.
     

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