Street Poetry (freestylez)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by dogfood420, Dec 31, 2004.

  1. dogfood420

    dogfood420 Member

    Anyone please add any freestyle writing that comes to mind.

    I just cannot understand,
    why a man,
    would spread his hand, cuffed,
    with money concealed to a stranger,
    desires to mame her,
    turn her lame.
    Beat her until she is insanly possessed by death,possibly.
    but the word death cannot express the emotion fealt,
    dealt with,
    it is like a celtic, ritual.
    Before I said a fistful, of money, and honey i plan to keep the subject hungry, for sin.
    For sin is spread within these womens cunts.
    I said **** and the subject is blunt,
    but, if you are still reading you must have come to the point.
    A wrecked women in detroit, stands.
    Legs wide,
    "Fifteen dollars and your dick can be inside,---- me -."
    She explains. Her eyes turned a lame color of gray,
    if she could, she would say,
    Niggah please I wont be,
    on that dick today.
    You could not pay for such a gift.
    But these womens clits hang dirty.
    "Give me thirty and I will do anything you want."
    They aggressivly taunt,
    yearn, groan, moan over money paid.
    Money today is not diapers for a,
    Bay bay,
    It's just enough for a rock,
    A rock that I will stick in my sock and lock away.
    Until later today when I find a gay,
    man who knows the hand I have been dealt.
    Who knows how I work for my wealth and does the same.
    Postitution will never change, but it can be tamed.
    These women claim to be worthless.
    Pull the curtains, that show society shut.
    Did jesus walk with the rabais' or did he walk with those who took it in the butt.
    Those who were "corrupt."
    Those who may have had eyes wide, but were forced to keep them shut.
    So we must, join hands and bust, the barrier between a scarier philosphy then we already read.
    These people may be,
    -junkies-
    but these people be.
     
  2. dogfood420

    dogfood420 Member

    freestyle poem written about prostitution.....
     
  3. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

    hey, i love the flow...

    it's hard for me to write about things that aren't pretty.

    i like your nick, dogfood420. LOL.
     
  4. its cool but i dont like the references to religion. fix that part and i could make it into song version.
     
  5. Wow babe, good poem. love you!!!
     
  6. love love love is what they say
    well pal if I had my way
    I'd be dishin' it --
    fishin' for the right one every day
    but the fish don't bite
    the end's in sight
    and I'm thinkin I might
    lay down and die
    cos the blue of the sky's not as blue as my inner eye, no
    and unless things start soon, oh
    I'm gonna rip it up tear it
    my heart can't bear it
    and I'm melting from the inside

    john said, all you need is love
    well when push comes to shove,
    and you've got none,
    then what, son?
    gonna lay down and take it like I do?
    or be brave enough to look for someone new?



    LOL yeah... uhhh not too good at freestyling... whooooooooooo!
     
  7. Spastic_Monkey

    Spastic_Monkey Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

    Piece by pice
    Release
    Anger and hate
    Don't negate
    Your feelings
    Forever reeling
    Through endless space and time
    Trapped in one mind
    One straight path
    Doin't even laugh
    You know it's true
    Who's ever been good enough for oyu
    Not I
    Not him
    Not her
    On whim
    Not a single thing you ever said
    Will be left on my mind
    Before I'm pronounced dead


    Yeah, It sucks, and it's pretty pointless, but what can I say, I'm bored and felt like posting :)
     
  8. I really dig it dogfood, you should write more, I love flow of consciousness poetry..
     
  9. dogfood420

    dogfood420 Member

    thnx all... please add more, i will soon just having a mind block at the moment.....

    Much love to all.
     
  10. Grunge

    Grunge Member

    all you see is broken glass
    you can watch the time pass
    you can see it spin
    you can see it crash
    what should you do now
    man what about that gash
    you are bleeding pretty bad
    theres smoke everywhere
    you should see the scene its mad
    what should you do
    lie down or move
    dont get up
    what are trying to prove
    you dont feel no pain?
    keep your head man dont go insane
    its all one big crash
    but the end result is real
    i know you dont want to feel
    that pain you feel coming
    open the door
    get out and face the world
     
  11. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

    about the original post:
    do you mean freestyle as in freestyle (AKA free-form) poetry or as in a rap freestyle
    cause if you really freestyled that (rap type) than not only am I Elvis but I just shot a nice fiery falcon out of my ass
    also, what type of posing faggot puts a 'z' at the end of freestyles?
     
  12. wideyed

    wideyed Member

    what type of "posting faggot" drops in with a question like that, duck? or is that dick - like what you suck? and that falcon comin outta your ass, well you should lay off the grass cause the flaming bird is a phoenix - either that or its my hand, doused in gas, tryin to send you a message.
     
  13. wideyed

    wideyed Member

    but you're right tho - i'd call dogfoods post more of a slam poem - ala the beatniks revisited, which i thought was good. flame on, though, dont let me stop you.
     
  14. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

    'posing faggot' not ""posting faggot""
    I know that a phoenix is the flaming bird I meant to say 'flaming falcon' cus' falcons don't flame, it adds to the unrealistic-ness
     
  15. wideyed

    wideyed Member

    hahaha i tried to slam you and i fucked it up - thats perfect. posing makes more sense of course - i'll let him defend himself from now on. but really Duck - ease up.. wheres the hippy love and respect?
     
  16. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

    It's okay I do it sometimes to
    and 'bout that ease up thing, I just really hate posers especially when people take them seriously
     
  17. First of all, I know better than anyone that he's not a poser. and second, It's his style of writting, I don't see you writting anything.
     
  18. dogfood420

    dogfood420 Member

    FIRST OFF dUCK YOUR INTELLIGENCY IS DEFINETLY SHOWN IN THE WAY THAT YOU SPEAK.
    WIDEEYED YOU ARE RIGHT THOUGH IT IS MORE OF A SLAM STYLE, BUT THE NIGHT THAT I DECIDED TO POST I WASN'T IN THE STATE OF MIND THAT I REALLY CARED WHAT IT READ.
    BACK TO YOU DUCK, IF YOU THINK UR BAD......BRING SOMETHIN.... TALK THE FRIGGIN TALK...YOU THINK YOU ACTUALLY CAN FREESTYLE, WHICH BY THE WAY YES I REALLY DO FREESTYLE I AM THAT HIP-HOP TYPE, THEN LETS SEE WHAT YA GOT. IF YOU DONT I THINK AN IGNORANT LITTLE BASTARD LIKE URSELF SHOULDN'T EVEN SPEAK ABOUT THE SUBJECT.
     
  19. thetaintedfae

    thetaintedfae Member

    Id have to agree, it is his own form of expression. As for who could write better I wouldn't know *is gonna sit that one out*
     
  20. As I sit here and drink my tea,
    my mind is busy exploring the sea.
    "Wow, that's alot of water"
    While I was busy watching the waves crash near me,
    an odd looking fish crawled up and sat on my knee.
    I looked down and when he spoke i didnt make a sound,
    "It's been far to long since I sung the water song."
    I bent down to offer a kiss,
    and with a swish - he was gone!


    Stop, think about it.
    take a step back, drop
    if you come running i'll put up my block
    A Space rock sent from Mr. Spock
    Live Long and Prosper, do it proper
    Don't be the next face on Crime Stoppers
    blowing through a silent wind
    I taste the void, I invite it in
    Its not a sin,
    but let me beggin my un charted travel
    on the mindless psycho babble
    please let me play some scrabble?
    as the poetry flows know body knows
    what i have to show
    but im gonna have to turn that tap on
    let it live long, and flow strong
    like those hits from your bong, infecting your mom
    and your mind
    its devine but i spit this to a secont time
     

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