Song about a Grateful dead concert... feedback please? :D

Been eleven years since we've been forsaken
I don't care about my education
I'd rather be where my heart is achin' to be.
I remember rows of eager faces
Ecstatic minds in imagined places
It seems so real I can almost taste it now.
A hundred-thousand flocked together
In the constant search for something better
We'd summer after summer get away.
And we danced until the music faded
Even though the law forbade it
Life was much less complicated then.
Oh
But life goes on.
There was music in the parking lots
And fighting for the closest spots
"Take your fix, just don't get caught" they said.
Throughout the nights we'd sing together
It felt like it could last forever
We journeyed on a never-ending road.
We ran barefoot through the park
But we made it to the show before it grew dark
The fire we made burned brighter than the stars.
Though the song remained throughout the ages
We could feel the Earth was turning pages
Everything was changing all too fast.
Oh
But life goes on.
But the years went by and we grew older
The seasons changed and the wind blew colder
It seems like we were bolder long ago.
There was a day the music ceased
And the silence brought us to our knees
The fog was laid too thick for us to see.
So the cord was cut without a sound
As our nation crumbled to the ground
We lay scattered in the ruins all around.
Because the storm had hit so fast
The devastation stole our past
And left us lost with no way to get back.
Oh
But life goes on.
Now here we are over ten years later
We've struggled and we've barely made it
Remember all the beauty we'd create?
For years we've bonded with eachother
Shared fellowship with all our brothers
I think that we can go another day.
Oh
Still life goes on.

 

Well being British my media opinion would be snooty and stuffy but not today. I LIKED IT.

 

Yay

 

it´s a great lyric, dreamy
like it alot

 

-sigh of relief- good to know.

 

I wish I could hear it with music.

 

Seems more like a poem than a song but it's cool.

 

Thank you. Much appreciated.

 

nice

 

Same here....

 

me too. i really liked it. nice work.

 

The only way that would be possible is with my sisters digital camera with video, but that really distorts your voice.

 

http://audacity.sourceforge.net/

just need a microphone then.