Skinny Girl with Starry eyes (A poem)

Tell me of your arms
and I drool on your hips
Mention of your hands
I call you to your feet
Breathe to me your hair
and I whisper at your skin
Leak to me your breasts because
I once lied about your eyes
Boast to me your figure
and Id sing prasies to your face
so beautiful I promise
true love is just a race
the truth is hard to swallow
and sleeping coats our chase
her blanket is still here
which drowns my tetra sorrow
brush my teeth bubbles green taste
but will your bones explode to sand
when you drift out into space?

I wrote this about a girl that I used to think was right for me Im still good friends with her, and shes a few months pregnant at the moment so I like to give her advice and be there for her since her current boyfriend has to work out of state. Great person really, I wrote this about 4 years ago when I broke up with her and my sons mom actually had it at her house lol :tongue: strange stuff, let me know what you think if you dont mind. Im not really a poet but I have always liked to try everything, and I tend to write about personal, awkward situations in abstract ways.

 

I like it, actually. The way you wrote it makes it sound like you're using the girl as a metaphor for something else, but I guess that's not the case. haha But yeah, I really like it.

 

Thanks Brian Personally, I think this is my favorite too, probably because the girl is beautiful, but she loves herself and knows shes beautiful, so shes a bitch

 

hahaha that's purdy funny. lol

 

good stuff

letme share
normalcy, nothing is what it seems. introduced to chemical imbalance,the mind takes
a turn left finding new positions to pick arpart the pixles, fixing your view onwhat is not there. pull your hand out of your pocket, open flat palm pick your coins pay for your life to get where you want to go, 'ownership'.

 

Thank you Depth! I like your short one there, I had to steal the pixel bit!

Heres a haikue I just wrote :


Pixelated carpet crawlers
Merge deeper inside my sister
Foaming her mouth

:tongue:
Yes I am slightly deranged, but if you've ever taken 6 hits of highly potent LSD, chances are you may see carpet crawlers climb in your sister and foam out of her mouth too

 

hahaha I've seen similar things:tongue:

 

Im sure you have man, some people you can just tell
and these carpet crawlers had rows of rounded layers of sharp teeth, its was pretty, fascinating!

 

wow, that is so beautiful

i LOVE it... I've read it hmm 4 timesn ow.

i think what I love the most about it, that feeling of it is the everything I love, dont distract me with one thing, it is the everything.. and maybe is it loving the everything too much and the reason for her to drift away.
I dont know, I'll shut up and read it again.

 

Thank you!
Should I post some more?!
I may still have some old poems laying around

 

you should definitely post a lot more,

I really enjoyed reading this one and Im impatient to read more.

 

Nice poems Jay!

Must admit I have weakness for trippy haiku's.

Maybe you can ponder another one at work , I guess you would need many heads though.