Skinny Girl with Starry eyes (A poem)

Discussion in 'Stoners Lounge' started by Krsna Bhakti, Jun 4, 2007.

  1. Krsna Bhakti

    Krsna Bhakti d-_-b JAMMING

    Tell me of your arms
    and I drool on your hips
    Mention of your hands
    I call you to your feet
    Breathe to me your hair
    and I whisper at your skin
    Leak to me your breasts because
    I once lied about your eyes
    Boast to me your figure
    and Id sing prasies to your face
    so beautiful I promise
    true love is just a race
    the truth is hard to swallow
    and sleeping coats our chase
    her blanket is still here
    which drowns my tetra sorrow
    brush my teeth bubbles green taste
    but will your bones explode to sand
    when you drift out into space?

    I wrote this about a girl that I used to think was right for me :) Im still good friends with her, and shes a few months pregnant at the moment so I like to give her advice and be there for her since her current boyfriend has to work out of state. Great person really, I wrote this about 4 years ago when I broke up with her and my sons mom actually had it at her house lol :tongue: strange stuff, let me know what you think if you dont mind. Im not really a poet but I have always liked to try everything, and I tend to write about personal, awkward situations in abstract ways.
     
  2. TopNotchStoner

    TopNotchStoner Georgia Homegrown

    I like it, actually. The way you wrote it makes it sound like you're using the girl as a metaphor for something else, but I guess that's not the case. haha But yeah, I really like it.
     
  3. Krsna Bhakti

    Krsna Bhakti d-_-b JAMMING

    Thanks Brian :) Personally, I think this is my favorite too, probably because the girl is beautiful, but she loves herself and knows shes beautiful, so shes a bitch ;)
     
  4. TopNotchStoner

    TopNotchStoner Georgia Homegrown

    hahaha that's purdy funny. lol
     
  5. DepTh

    DepTh Member

    good stuff

    letme share
    normalcy, nothing is what it seems. introduced to chemical imbalance,the mind takes
    a turn left finding new positions to pick arpart the pixles, fixing your view onwhat is not there. pull your hand out of your pocket, open flat palm pick your coins pay for your life to get where you want to go, 'ownership'.
     
  6. Krsna Bhakti

    Krsna Bhakti d-_-b JAMMING

    Thank you Depth! I like your short one there, I had to steal the pixel bit!

    Heres a haikue I just wrote :


    Pixelated carpet crawlers
    Merge deeper inside my sister
    Foaming her mouth

    :tongue:
    Yes I am slightly deranged, but if you've ever taken 6 hits of highly potent LSD, chances are you may see carpet crawlers climb in your sister and foam out of her mouth too ;)
     
  7. TopNotchStoner

    TopNotchStoner Georgia Homegrown

    hahaha I've seen similar things:tongue:
     
  8. Krsna Bhakti

    Krsna Bhakti d-_-b JAMMING

    Im sure you have man, some people you can just tell :)
    and these carpet crawlers had rows of rounded layers of sharp teeth, its was pretty, fascinating!
     
  9. Autentique

    Autentique wonderfabulastic

    wow, that is so beautiful :)

    i LOVE it... I've read it hmm 4 timesn ow.

    i think what I love the most about it, that feeling of it is the everything I love, dont distract me with one thing, it is the everything.. and maybe is it loving the everything too much and the reason for her to drift away.
    I dont know, I'll shut up and read it again.
     
  10. Krsna Bhakti

    Krsna Bhakti d-_-b JAMMING

    Thank you! :)
    Should I post some more?!
    I may still have some old poems laying around
     
  11. Autentique

    Autentique wonderfabulastic

    you should definitely post a lot more,

    I really enjoyed reading this one and Im impatient to read more.
     
  12. Grapefruity

    Grapefruity Sunny Side Up

    Nice poems Jay!

    Must admit I have weakness for trippy haiku's.

    Maybe you can ponder another one at work , I guess you would need many heads though.
     

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