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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by mrsmorrison27, Feb 3, 2006.

  1. mrsmorrison27

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    I WISH MY LOVE
    My love, I wish I had your heart so I could make you hurt,
    the way your hurt me. My love, I wish I was your lover, so
    I could give you one night and leave you begging for more.
    I wish I were your best friend so I could tell you lies that
    would make you feel like shit. My love, I wish I was your
    God, so I could make you dissapear.But most of all, my love,
    I wish I was your bird, so I could sing in your ear when you
    want silence.

    THE MERMAID
    My leg is tired to the weight of your body, my heart is
    beating to the rythm of your guitar, Crazy how that hair
    across your face could make my body shake. Your crooked
    smile coming my way screaming open for business. Don't
    try to seduce the mermaid, I'll give you just one taste, and
    then pull you down, into a blissful death.

    THE WHORE
    I can take your favorite jeans and wear them more than you
    do. I'll take your favorite shirt and make a bikini top, I'll
    take your heart and build my own playground. Cruelty is
    what I do best, so lend me your most personal of things, let
    me fuck with your mind, until I'm the only thing you think
    about. I'll tempt you with ungodly apeal. I'll tease until you
    can't move.. are you ready?
     
  2. TreeFiddy

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    LOVE that line. It is a great conclusion tothe poem, which I really enjoyed. I thought the first was the best, and then the second, and then the third. But all were good :).

    You have a unique style, both in the structure of the poems and the wording style you choose to express them through.
     
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