scarlet trails

english roses lined your bed
beneath the sheets
until you bled in your sleep
the table waited
for you in the morning
but you liked to lay
among the thorns
didn't you?

i wrote so many letters
that i'll never address
you with
so many poems that
do not contain your name
i've only entered the factors
that your presence presented
me with
like the scarlet trails
you draped across me
that night you came over
to sleep
among other things
you couldn't wait for the wounds to heal
before you came to me
inquiring as to whether or not
i'd like to see
what followed you home from the bar
he still sits in the corner
whispering the mobile to life

while you lay awake questioning
eyes downcast
whether or not it is justified
to deny this man his breath
and each night
to cradle him
in a bed that might be his last

 

I liked it, the pace, the mood and loved the beginning.

 

i really like the beginning of this! the last part lost me though, but i think i have a.d.d. i have a hard time really sticking out till the end of longer poems (as you can see from my poems getting shorter...)

 

it's not ADD, you're an indigo kid!

and yeah the middle of this poem is a bit tedious. i think the beginning is my favorite, but i like the end too. the middle was the hardest part to write. i had so many ideas i wanted to express...

 

To me the middle was NOT tedious....so maybe it spoke truth too vanilla....but this meant a lot to me...jealous, but glad you wrote it, so that I could discover it...you've no idea how much this touches....

 

what does that mean???

 

"The Indigo Child is a boy or girl who displays a new and unusual set of psychological attributes, revealing a pattern of behavior generally undocumented before. This pattern has singularly unique factors that call for parents and teachers to change their treatment and upbringing of these kids to assist them in achieving balance and harmony in their lives, and to help them avoid frustration."

http://www.innerself.com/Parenting/indigo_children.htm

instead of learning disabilities, it's like kids "with ADD, ADHD, dislexia"- they aren't disabled, they simply are insecure owners of open, existential, intellectual minds.