review this, please :)

Discussion in 'Writers Forum' started by cindylenier, Aug 8, 2007.

  1. cindylenier

    cindylenier Member

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    Hey all,

    I wrote something that came to my mind when I found this interesting looking stone in my backyard. Thought I'd share it. (Go easy, people, I'm new here) :)

    The Stone



    What possibilities lie in a little stone? What secrets does it hold? What stories does it contain? What gateways can it unlock? For a stone is anything one imagines it to be.



    Turn it over in your hand, in your mind. Examine its infinite faces, the grooves that speak of a not negligible existence, the smoothness that testifies to an unbreakable spirit. As you look and see, imagine.



    Imagine- it hurtles through space, cold, devoid of life, an asteroid, escaping confining gravities, tumbling through space, traveling forever

    -it travels sedentarily, tracing a fixed path, a planet, dreaming not of flying, but of nurturing, millions of lives on its surface, billions

    -it burns, fiery, feisty, a star, throwing out, giving, all it can, blazing triumphantly in the darkness, powerful

    -it lies calmly, the weight of infinite drops on it, the ocean, bearing witness to unrestrained life, mysterious, amazing, wet, watching, learning

    -it falls through the air, the hand of a child closing around it, throwing it up, fleeting flight, a pause as forces rearrange themselves, the return

    -it is carried , great distances passing beneath it, circling, whirling, a hurricane, flitting between edges, between chaos and calm, plowing through elements, spinning power

    -it writhes, throwing out white fire, unleashed power, the hands of magic, evoking, channeling life force, a universe flows through it

    -it lies perfectly still, entombed, the walls of a great structure, not a prisoner, an observer, resting, knowing that all walls fall, new experiences await

    -it stays in its furrow, content, for millennia, great beasts trod on it, disappear, reappear, life shifts, changes all around it, it watches

    -it crumbles, turns to dust, so fine, a gust of wind carries it everywhere, assimilated, as all things are, into the cycle of life, one day a planet, another an insect, one day you.
     
  2. Musikero

    Musikero Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    That's pretty deep. :)
     
  3. dirtydog

    dirtydog Banned

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    Very good. Did you know the lyrics to "America the Beautiful" were written on the summit of a 14,000 foot mountain (Pikes Peak, Colorado)?
     
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