Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Bhaskar, Jan 20, 2005.

  1. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

    Like a tear trapped
    wrapped in garnet
    cradled in your neck
    you laugh...
    the sides of your mouth crinkle
    and your eyes shine
    like a watery sun.

    You're everything I wanted
    you have a rainstone in your throat.
  2. A rainstone. Sadness? Your eyes shine like a watery sun. Beautiful.

    Nice poem.

  3. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

    ~* I liked it alot! Damn nice but we are both fond of the same stylings. I grew up breathing Richard Brautigan. I knew "The Pill vs The Springhill Mining Disaster" by heart at the tender and silly age of 14 amd read his novels as well. I finally found a book that has three of his works in one book but I would truly love to replace his novel, "A Confederate General from Big Sur" one day. I still breath Brautigan. Brautigan, the Merry Pranksters and Peter Max (during his psychedelic days) were major influences, lol, no wonder I'm a bit twisted. Love yah B-ness! *~
  4. browneydgrl

    browneydgrl Member

  5. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

    Oooooh gorgeous capture!! :) Bittersweet perfection...very much enjoyed.
  6. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

    brautigan all the way. He captures the essence of youth, of purity and innocence, it seems to be as much a part of him as his breath itself. I fear though that I write far too much like him.

    The day I felt I could call mysel a poet was the day you told me you liked one of my poems better than his...I dont remember which poem, lol!

    I love you mom!
  7. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    A beautiful poem with lapis overtones.
  8. *peace*child*

    *peace*child* Member

    I loved your poem. Peace and love...
  9. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

    Thank you peacechild...Sylvanlightning...what are lapis overtones?
  10. i agree with all here
    a beautiful,open feeling of life....
    with all we feel even sadness

    to learn is to live......

    love n peace from saff

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