Playing Mistakenly

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by does2, Dec 28, 2009.

  1. does2

    does2 Member

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    Handsome rots. Time's ransom plots. Phantom thoughts scattered. Scatter thoughts planted in pots. Growing into tragic pitter-patter.

    Magic sought after dawn. Gone in a gust of wrong. Bust into song, jig because I'm a pawn. Supple puppet repelling. Thunder doublet rebelling. Under the thumb of regret. Saunter selling no couplet coupled yet. Bet the banter is running water with no console. No control. Uphold knotter holding his father.

    Better butter. Inspected shutter. Disappointment. Toast falls in that direction. Anointment with no appointment. Rejected stutter without election. Detect counter detection. Deterred but reflected. Repented and upended. Preferred direction without inspection. Referred to as enjoyment.
     
  2. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    Now this is a great piece.
    It could be anything, it could be prose, it could be a poem, it could be lyrics, it just flows.
    Lots of imagery and emotion crammed into short compact sentences, a recipe for success.
     
  3. does2

    does2 Member

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    You pegged it correctly.

    I didn't know what it was when I was writing it, it just came out.
     
  4. knottygrl

    knottygrl Member

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    Total slam poetry! This could be a performance piece, you should get into it! dig it for sure, it flows...
     
  5. does2

    does2 Member

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    Thanks. Great suggestion.
     

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