Pimp of the earth

Had another idea today, so I wrote it down. Tell me what you think, and some feedback and tips would be nice too.

[font=&quot]Take our mother,[/font]

[font=&quot]Steal her,[/font]

[font=&quot]Sell her,[/font]

[font=&quot]Turn her soul to [/font]

[font=&quot]Profit.[/font]

[font=&quot]You’re the pimp of the earth.[/font]

[font=&quot] [/font]

[font=&quot]Her body is our host,[/font]

[font=&quot]Destroy it.[/font]

[font=&quot]Cut the womb.[/font]

[font=&quot]Foetal suicide.[/font]

[font=&quot]You’re the pimp of the earth.[/font]

[font=&quot] [/font]

[font=&quot]Dress her in fishnets,[/font]

[font=&quot]Mini skirt,[/font]

[font=&quot]Lip-gloss,[/font]

[font=&quot]Attract the [/font]

[font=&quot]Highest buyer.[/font]

[font=&quot]You’re the pimp of the earth.[/font]

[font=&quot] [/font]

[font=&quot]Sell her to[/font]

[font=&quot]Another child.[/font]

[font=&quot]Stop the incest.[/font]

[font=&quot]You never will.[/font]

[font=&quot]You’re the pimp of the earth.[/font]


Thanks for reading, much love to you all!

 

Damn!

I'd like to see more of that actually.

 

I thought this was about "MAN" raping and destroying "mother earth", but I don't see the connection.

I'm not sure I get this poem.

 

^ yeah the title kind of makes it sound like a nature type poem. The actual poem isn't about nature, as far as I could tell. Maybe if you changed the title...?
Other than that, I liked it.

 

I think it's great but I would leave out the last verse. I don't think it fits with the idea.
I like the short command like lines. Just sort of stating the facts but I don't see how incest and pimps mix. Maybe a bit of minor adjustment and developing the original PIMP idea more would make it more complete.

Good writing all the same.
Peace,
A.

 

My eye caught the note of sexual deplorability against women.
It's pretty basic, but that's what gives it its' respect appeal.
I like it cuz it's bold where things might DIE!!!!
Oh no!

It's something tougher to become commercially popularized, and that puts a smile on my face. Fukken corporations and their damn greedy overtakings...
I have respect for the author.

 

thank you so much for all of these nice comments. To clear things up (I should have explained, I'm sorry), this poem is about man raping the earth. I refer to her as 'mother' as in mother earth. In the next verse I refer to to earth as our host, and I say that we are destroying it to cause our own suicide, we are the foetus. In the next verse, I say we are dressing her up, i.e. building skyscrapers e.t.c. to make it more appealing. In the next verse, I said sell her to another child, which is true, since we are all children of the earth.

I hope this cleared up some confusion, sorry about not explaining it :tongue:

 

I think I get it a bit better now...