haha.... pretty self explanatory Each shudder grows in intensity the passionate eyes burning into mine love engrained in them My lover's eyes deep pools in which i would gladly drown Each breath now a gasp the waves now crashing the eyes close a monsoon commencing pounding the shore harder, faster screaming now holding on for precious life the waves crash together MY GOD! Love, YOU were made for ME
That's really a beautiful piece. Though at first I wasn't really into it. For me the first stanza is kind of "throw away" in a sense that I see how it got the piece started, but reading it over without it and adding (are) to the line (so it makes up for the lost first stanza): "My lover's eyes deep pools" gets right into the poem and the point. but it's not my work, I think it's fantastic I'd be curious if you intended on carrying this theme out with other forces of nature.
