I was encouraged to share some of my writings, so I will. Here's a fan fiction about Jeff Buckley I did a while ago. Enjoy http://community.livejournal.com/sirensfiction/5162.html Feedback is always appreciated. -Kristen
I had to do a little internet search to find out who Jeff Buckley was. It sounds like you, Kristen, are putting yourself or someone with the same name in the role of Buckley's girl friend. Buckley died in 1997 at the age of 31, when you would have been about 11, if you're 22 now. I'm not familiar with Buckley's music, but his Wikipedia biography shows him to be a successful folk/rock guitarist. Your short story is well written, with good spelling and grammar, but it lacks a story line other than a description of spoiled rock star behaviour, with Buckley kicking a hole in a speaker. Describing a tour bus as looking like a prison is interesting, but the jails I've seen don't look much like a rock star's tour bus. If you can expand the idea and develop a story line, you'll have some pretty successful writing happening. People are more likely to read your work here if you paste to this site, rather than provide a link.
