To You... The manifestation of lust. Your hair like waterfalls of chocolaty water. You are voluptuousness personified. Your are walking wet dream, my love. Come, come to me. Asphyxiation, (your not into that) I am, but thats cool. Our conversation, like pegs of cream melting in the coffee of my love. I'D SUPERGLUE MY PENIS TO MY BELLY FOR YOU!!! I open your labia like beautiful curtains of beefy splendor. BEHOLD. The show must go on. I lose myself in your depth. Thrust, Press, Rotate 90 degrees, Engage rotor then clock out. The crowd watches and judges my every move. X Wrong, (BOOO) But thats cool. Wafting, you smell of babies rolling in meadows of lavender. Our double glazed differences keep us apart For now You exude beauty from every crevice. You radiate joy like a baby duck hatched from the egg. New beginning, life. Bursting forth, your amnion rapids. Breaking through the boundaries of love, look what It may yield. 7 f a t c o w s 7skinnycows Years of plenty and years of drought. The corn of your love may run out! But think... I sing to you, as Gabriel To Mary. You carry a child, in your oven of blood... vessels. Half empty? HALF FULL! You do not see it this way however. Your jewels of understanding have turned To Shits Of Distain. The innocence of my world implodes under The fat bastard child That sits upon your thigh. I have done nothing wrong, you cry in memory of our night. :nopity:
love the first paragraph, there are a lot of things i would change but that is just my style- your style is very distinct, i love the reference to cream melting into the coffee, ID SUPERGLUE etc ..that shit is hilarious but totally random lol, beefy may not be the right adjective but i dont know really lol it just sounds nasty to me. the third paragraph is pretty good, the cows make no sense to me but its still good, the idea. did you mean disdain? and chocolatey at the beginning? its very creative and you have great rhythm and matephors, i agree with the lizard king, and keep writing AND THANKS A BUNCHES =P
I rigged a device so if my heartbeat drops below 10 bpm Big Ben will explode. I know I'm alive because it hasn't yet.
Got some kicks out of this. I like your style. Not real keen on the "hair like waterfalls of chocolaty water" thing. But hilarious. Keep on writin!
hilarious. lots of energy in this. revision never hurts but it might be even better to plow ahead. keep writing, I'm looking forward to what you make next.
