Lake Poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Jerry, Nov 21, 2005.

  1. Jerry

    Jerry Member

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    The woods are like dark stone
    wolfs cry to rising moon
    In wilderness I watch alone
    dawn is coming soon

    Night is like a sinking sky
    stars shine below my eyes
    the lake reflects brilliant lies
    this place seems so ancient and...so wise

    Out here there are no voices
    only wild sounds
    out here there are no choices
    only natures bounds

    Watch the stars and heavens dance
    Cutting through the dark unknown
    how could we be alive by chance?
    just look at what your shown

    The water is like black glass
    bottomless mirror by my side
    nestled in cool wet grass
    where in daylight it will hide

    ©Jerry
     
  2. make art not war

    make art not war Member

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    This was beautiful and a joy to read. Was this an actual lake that inspired this or is it just what you think a lake looks like at night
     
  3. Jerry

    Jerry Member

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    I came up with most of the words when I really was at a "lake" (more of a pond really) at night, but the poem was actually written later when I had some paper and a pencil. Thanks for the feedback.
     
  4. make art not war

    make art not war Member

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    Yeah, sure, no problem, man.
    You're so lucky to live by a lake, let alone a pond.
    There's nothing here but desert, and sure I have gotten some inspiration through that but the most of the desert is disguised with adultery, gamble, lies, and sexism.
    Good ol' Sin City
     
  5. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Excellent poem man, I can see this being a song, with the third stanza as the chorus. I dunno, that really just suggested itself to me, it read like one. Good stuff bro

    And MANW, i bet once you get away from the city the desert is a pretty place, especially at night, provided you're far enough away from the city to see them.
     
  6. Jerry

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    A desert disguised with adultery, gamble, lies, sexism and sins could make up so great poems man. Some of that stuff can go really deep.
     
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