Lady Paradox

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by NaykidApe, Jan 15, 2005.

  1. NaykidApe

    NaykidApe Bomb the Ban

    You're cool and warm

    Hot and cold

    Open and mysterious

    Bright and unfathomable

    You make me feel like I can do anything

    You make me feel helpless

    I want to sweep you off your feet

    I want to run and hide

    Your smile is an invitation and a warning

    I know everything about you

    I wonder what your name is.
     
  2. NaykidApe

    NaykidApe Bomb the Ban

    This poem is cliche' and original


    Romantic and a little creepy (now that I think about it).
     
  3. lover/young_peace

    lover/young_peace Senior Member

    I loved it. :) Maybe it would seem somewhat little cliche to an experience poet, but to someone a bit more naive, (like myself :) ) the ending was a total surprise. You did a great job of setting that up.

    It does leave the reader feeling a bit... unsettled. Which is totally awesome. :D
     
  4. NaykidApe

    NaykidApe Bomb the Ban

  5. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

    Well it relies heavily on contrasts, some more original than others (hot & cold, warm & cool)
    But -invitation & a warning-, -know everything about you - yet not your name- Liked those a lot! Reckless, desperate, and yeah romantic...
     
  6. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

    i like it!

    very good twist at the end!
     
  7. NaykidApe

    NaykidApe Bomb the Ban

    Wow! Reckless, desperate, twisted,....


    I feel like I've captured the essence of most of my relationships in this one.


    ;) Seriously, thanx guys.
     
  8. lover/young_peace

    lover/young_peace Senior Member

    Ahahah :D
     

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