Lady Paradox

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by NaykidApe, Jan 15, 2005.

  1. NaykidApe

    NaykidApe Bomb the Ban

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    You're cool and warm

    Hot and cold

    Open and mysterious

    Bright and unfathomable

    You make me feel like I can do anything

    You make me feel helpless

    I want to sweep you off your feet

    I want to run and hide

    Your smile is an invitation and a warning

    I know everything about you

    I wonder what your name is.
     
  2. NaykidApe

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    This poem is cliche' and original


    Romantic and a little creepy (now that I think about it).
     
  3. lover/young_peace

    lover/young_peace Senior Member

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    I loved it. :) Maybe it would seem somewhat little cliche to an experience poet, but to someone a bit more naive, (like myself :) ) the ending was a total surprise. You did a great job of setting that up.

    It does leave the reader feeling a bit... unsettled. Which is totally awesome. :D
     
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  5. KittenX

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    Well it relies heavily on contrasts, some more original than others (hot & cold, warm & cool)
    But -invitation & a warning-, -know everything about you - yet not your name- Liked those a lot! Reckless, desperate, and yeah romantic...
     
  6. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    i like it!

    very good twist at the end!
     
  7. NaykidApe

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    Wow! Reckless, desperate, twisted,....


    I feel like I've captured the essence of most of my relationships in this one.


    ;) Seriously, thanx guys.
     
  8. lover/young_peace

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    Ahahah :D
     

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