Do not approach me Do not talk to me I forbid you to even so much as glance as me Don’t tell me about my sharp sense of humor Don’t tell me how I’m different from the others Don’t lay those precious eyes of yours on me And tell me how you love me I am not interested in a relationship Because nothing lasts forever In this wretched world of ours I have no desire for this thing called love Not after what I have been through A man much smarter than I Once said it is better to have loved and lost Then to not have loved at all But this man has not seen the tears I have shed He has not witnessed the sleepless nights Kept awake with thoughts of our time together He has not considered how you torment me In damned near all of my dreams Keep your fucking distance, woman!
Oh shit, my bad man. I didn't realize i posted this here before. But if you don't like the poem, that's cool. But give me some constructive criticism. Why don't you like it? I'm new to this, so help me get better.
hmm... i'm afraid there's not too much i can do about that, friend. Sorry you didn't like it, but thanks for the feedback!
Here's my version. I took lots of stuff out. I like it much more now, thanks! :chef: Keep Your Distance Approach me Talk to me So much as glance My sharp sense Eyes on me How you love me Desire for this thing After what I have been I have witnessed the thoughts of our time Damned near all of my dreams keep your distance Woman
Well, it's different. although that last stanza is a bit unclear... I'm sorry you didn't like it, but i do hope that you will provide feedback in the future
