Just try it..:*

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sexymesamama, Jun 13, 2006.

  1. sexymesamama

    sexymesamama Member

    Just try it

    Before you wake up,

    After you wash your face.

    Take a look outside,

    Realize it’s a wonderful place

    Close your eyes,

    Take a deep breath.

    NO need to worry,

    About life or death.

    No rules to hold you back now

    You’re totally free.

    Sex, Drugs, and rock-n-Roll baby,

    that’s the way it should be!

  2. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

    I liked it until the last two lines. Not that there's anything wrong with those things (to a point), but it's so cliche, and I'm not sure that is really the point of life anyways.
  3. steel_bubbles

    steel_bubbles Member

    It's a good poem, but I generally don't like the topic. Most of our world is a terrible place. I didn't like the last 2 lines either, sounded to cliche. Otherwise, it's a good poem.

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