I don't know about this one...Title?

And when the cuts don't hurt anymore
and the bleeding has surpassed the pain.
When the lies you tell shift silently into truths
and I believe in you again,
this is where I'll be.

Too far from heaven.
Too close to hell.

And everything is the color of jade.
A hint of peace belies the truth that
tangles on our tongues.
We are the reason we don't believe.
Faith casts too many shadows
And we are afraid of the dark.

 

first of all beautiful work! second of all how about Shadows??

 

thanks, by the way...... I like shadows, actually..... I was just super stuck and couldn't think of a decent logical title.....



~Trin

 

I think shadows fits it quite well...beautiful word usage by the way

 

Wow, sweetdreadlover, that was a little big.


Nice poem, I think shadows fits very well.

 

little big?? i like my making my points in very large red letters..lol..sorry bout that....

 

I think you should call it 'In Between'

 

haha....sam? interesting.....

 

is it just me or is this forum suppose to be for constructive critisism...anyways....when are ya gonna post soem more beautiful work for us to read babe???

 

lol.... as soon as I'm inspired.....



~Trin

 

ill be waiting and watching for more

 

Excellent vibes. I really liked the poem and the way it flows so easily. Please send more. If you care enough to read it, I'm posting a poem as a follow-up to yours. It's called "In from the Darkness". Enjoy.


ALI

 

maybe "Slowly Bleeding"

 

artificial life.. or ummm... Faded... stain filled heart, ummm.. opened wounds.. umm haa haaa not totally sure.. those are just ideas haa haa

 

lol.... I think sam's growing on me.... either way, here's my latest.... It's called "Generation":


http://hipforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=16795



~Trin