i am soft

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by *electrica*, Apr 14, 2005.

  1. *electrica*

    *electrica* Member

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    (i am prone i am prone i am prone)
    i'm just a mixed up girl
    Who sometimes forgets
    Not to play with knives
    That she needs to eat
    And needs to sleep
    i'm just a little mixed up
    So i often forget
    That nudity isn't love
    That i really can't play guitar
    That i could have a future
    If i only cared
    Sometimes i forget
    That i'm a mixed up girl
    Sometimes i can't remember
    Who to be today
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    this is great, *electrica*

    love the personal intensity, how there's volumes that could be spoken between the lines... one of the best I've read from you, thanks for sharing it!
     
  3. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    i love this part:

    'i'm just a little mixed up
    So i often forget
    That nudity isn't love'

    that was heavy.
     
  4. browneydgrl

    browneydgrl Member

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    i love it. fulmah's observation of "volumes between the lines" hit the nail right on the head.
     
  5. TomDijon

    TomDijon Member

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    you are soft, so be your own sculpter this time, don't let anyone mold you
     
  6. browneydgrl

    browneydgrl Member

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    p.s. tom, i am so fascinated by your signature
     
  7. Zion

    Zion Member

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    WOrd...Isn't it amazing how soft we are though... Wow...?
     
  8. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    mmm liked this. esp this:

    i'm just a little mixed up
    So i often forget
    That nudity isn't love
    That i really can't play guitar
     
  9. paix

    paix Senior Member

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    it's so simple and true and lovley, really beautiful
     
  10. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Agreeing with all, not much more to say except that you present a universal state of mind, but the way you go about it is very unique.
     
  11. Altrin-Secus

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    "who to be today" that is a great last line
     

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