Haiku 5-7-5

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by 8eyedspy, Feb 1, 2007.

  1. 8eyedspy

    8eyedspy Member

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    I dabble in poetry and occassionally write short fictions.

    Anyone care to join me in haiku?

    3 lines of imagery, separate on their own, but connect as a whole tell a tale or hopefully, elicit an emotion.
    BTW any purists out there, I am not a master, and veer off the traditional simply because this is the new millenium and the best haikus are centuries old. I like living in the now.

    Example:

    first line 5 syllables black panthers pacing
    second line 7 syllables animal lover frees cats
    third line 5 syllables sillhouettes draw blood

    Here's a few to check out.

    balmy flamingoes
    snow shoveler scrapes sidewalk
    pink feather parade

    two boats drift downstream
    hands paddling against current
    pretty waterfall

    big fish eat small fish
    golden parachutes descend
    executives rest

    Now for the game.

    Take the last line of a haiku and make a new one, then the next player does the same in response.

    8I
     
  2. 8eyedspy

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    crystal meth lab burns
    palace full of shards explodes
    kaleidescope deaths
     
  3. deram_scholzara

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    Best Friends

    Lone birds sigh like wind,
    Yet their loves shall always sing.
    Their souls always hear.
     
  4. 8eyedspy

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    their souls always hear

    soft whispers of devotion
    echoes through eons
     
  5. andallthatstocome

    andallthatstocome not a squid

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    echos through eons
    take your mind down dark alleys
    the trip of your life.
     
  6. 8eyedspy

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    the trip of your life

    into her arms, madonna
    snug against her breast
     
  7. 8eyedspy

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    snug against her breast

    mist vanishes from windshield
    cop taps the window
     
  8. ThisBirdHasFlown

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    Misty window pane
    silence in the morning rain
    before the downpour
     
  9. 8eyedspy

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    before the downpour
    hip-hop throwdowns throughout town
    slow ride Compton side
     
  10. 8eyedspy

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    slow ride Compton side

    speeder blows stoplight signal
    graveside eulogies
     
  11. 8eyedspy

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    graveside eulogies
    all in a row friends gone down
    one boy stands alone
     
  12. 8eyedspy

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    one boy stands alone
    rice paddies steaming at dawn
    napalm aftermath
     
  13. 8eyedspy

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    napalm aftermath

    green sprouts eaten by orphans
    mouthful of ashes
     
  14. Sirius

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    graveside eulogies
    Death needs no introduction
    come to me he says......
     
  15. 8eyedspy

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    come to me he says

    a soft touch on the shoulder
    she joins the harvest
     
  16. 8eyedspy

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    she joins the harvest

    at Shiloh the silohs rise
    Amber wades through grain
     
  17. 8eyedspy

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    Amber wades through grain

    golden, full of summer sun
    a farmer boy's dream
     
  18. 8eyedspy

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    a farmer boy dreams
    pearl divers collecting shells
    one fin breaks the waves
     
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    one fin breaks the waves

    angels fall to earth too fast
    darnkness heals my eyes
     
  20. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    darkness heals my eyes
    once i stare into the sun
    it begins today
     

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