Ghost Mall

The other day I journeyed through the Ghost Mall
have you ever seen slow immaculate death?
cold and unforgiving, but receiving pay
as a prisoner forced to pray
I reached high to escape
but the doors were locked
with chains to a green sign
which said... ÒPrepare to meet thy GodÓ

 

Suggestion: green color is not the color of horror. Red works better.

Otherwise, the poem is great!

 

I thought of Jim Morrison when I read the line-'Have you ever seen slow immaculate death?' I love Jim.


Michelle

 

Pretty sweet, I would suggest continuing it a little more.