freestyle about weed

I made this on another forum, the original question was asking if anyone has ever written a song, and most people were writing rap lyrics

"I wrote a love song once when I was young it was very 70-ish and had similar tune to Sooner or Later (I think that's by Grass Roots but I'm not sure...)

but yeah
time for my freestyle, I seriously am going to freestyle this for a bit no editing
yo yo yo yo
check this hsit
I got the best weed in town
makes all the ****as come aroun'
they smoke up my shit
get high and pass otu on one hit
the shit I got million time better than dro
and the smoke from it has the smoothest flow
so come over here and buy a dime
of the weed from this rhyme


that actually wasn't too bad..."

I tonly took me about a minute or two, like it?

 

Woah. That's just awful.

 

I smoked some dro then f*cked a hoe
Went out in tha snow I saw a tree
I had to pee now Wheres my weed
You SOB, you stole my green
This shit is cold lets go inside
Smoked more dro, O theres my weed
Cut my toe and now it bleeds
But I dont care I found my weed

 

Holy crap. I didn't think you could be worse but you are.

 

I dont care, you'll probably be banned by tomorrow. But since your so good at this crap lets see you make one.

 

GREAT ANSWER

I'm a white ass honkey mother fucker I shouldn't be able to do as well as I did....

 

I'm just being honest. I think they are both honestly terrible. I'm sorry if that offends you, maybe you shouldn't post this up there.

 

didn't offend me at all
just made you seem like an asshole

 

Isnt it past your bedtime kid?

 

How old are you? And why do you assume I'm a kid?

 

fuck off you noob or do u want to get hit with the banstick too?

coming into ppl's threads and just bashing pointlessly/unprovokenly is why there should be a points system/warning system here

ppl are just rhyming and going off about what they like, at least this thread is original compared to the other crap in here, dont Hate or dont post.

 

Chill out dude. He said "I tonly took me about a minute or two, like it?

He asked if we liked it. I said no. If he only wanted people that liked it to reply he should have said "if you like it let me know!" not "Do you like it?"

Stop being such an ass.

 

I was wondering that as well...

 

Hey duck if it made me look like an asshole sorry, I'm just being honest.

 

thank you for defending me, it's real cool

but I agree with the other guy on this one...

 

I know, I'm just saying how it made you look, just telling you the truth, I'm unbias don't worry bout that

 

And who the fuck are you calling a noob digitalldj?

 

Oh really fucking clever!

 

tea, you are no arnold. He would pound you into a pile of shit.