you lie there exhausted from emotion withheld blame hangs in the air like a note... unfinished in the confusion there is love still in darkness, light I hold open my hand and let your blame rest upon it I could blow it away but I don't I accept it, as it is and in my eyes there is love still and in my heart, grace
It's tense, but ... I think it would be tenser if you were more subtle. Leave some things half said? Maybe give an idea about what it is that the blame is for, or the nature of the crime. Is it petty or important?
