First Poem

Her eyes, bright as the flames of a million suns.
Searing through me as if one of Cupid's own arrows.
Stabbing right through my heart
Leaving me crippled, disoriented, joyous...in love

please comment.

 

i know what ya mean.

girl that sits next to me in my philosophy110 class.........eyes.........damn.

[has. a. boyfriend. DAMN.]

 

Same situation here. But not at school.

 

beautiful...

'Leaving me crippled, disoriented, joyous... in love'

i love this description.

 

Thanks alot

 

Great Poetry!!!!

 

"Her eyes, bright as the flames of a million suns"<<brilliant, man...it reminds me of the girl i like, man...her eyes are so fuckin pretty

 

i toom enjoyed the unique look at the definition of love...

also the line about stabbing yer heart or whatever...good

 

Promising. I know this is your first,but it'd be interesting to see what you could accomplish with much loinger poems though.

 

My second peom(wich i posted on here) is longer. But i dont think its as good.