Fields of Stone

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by PoemBased, Apr 21, 2007.

  1. PoemBased

    PoemBased Member

    Alone I ride through stoney fields.
    The hoofs my pride, no shoes to shield;
    Through these waste lands of mine, to the mountains ahead,
    Past swamps left behind from the tears I've shed.

    The winds my guide: to no path I yield,
    But take in stride the pain it wields.
    From a cloudless sky the rain falls still,
    Petrified as my force of will.

    Craddled by Darkness, the final companion
    For the lost and heartless that love abondoned.
    Now I ride, with him alone; grinding my pride
    On these fields of stone...
     
  2. Isil

    Isil Member

    Ooh wow, thats nice.

    I like the way the words flow.
     
  3. myself

    myself just me

  4. Nalencer

    Nalencer Dig Yourself

    That's really nice. It could be longer though.
     
  5. PoemBased

    PoemBased Member

    Thanks guys need input, write for my self but like others to see it to
    realy? It is short but it coverd my point. Past present and future. my view on non-conformity and athority, (can't spell by the way) fear of a none advancing life and the momory of a truly broken heart. I ussualy never go more then 4-6 stanzas at 4 to five lines each. And if its all one body, never more then 3/4 of the page
     
  6. Miss_Beatle

    Miss_Beatle Beatlemaniac

    Oh I really like it! Great job!
     

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