The following is a new piece I'm writing. Let me know if its any good... The hallway lead down to an auditorium stuffed with green: tables, posters, clothing, and drapes. There were dozens of laptops, LCD displays and speakers, with networks of wires running along the walls. What a set up. I walked towards the room to check it out, instantly noting the sign, “Evolving Your Consciousness.” I stopped. Checked again. Hippies? New Agers? Was it legit? I wasn’t sure if I was walking into a nightmare of strange if this was something truly interesting. Call me the cynic, but I couldn’t help it these days. I’d seen and read my fair share of theories, and many of them tended to suspend critical thought in favor of some idealism. Not today, I thought. “Hello! Take a booklet and come on in.” I looked up to see a tiny book in my face, also named “Evolving Your Consciousness.” A lady was holding it out for me with a smile that was sincere, not zealous. I nodded, taking it and stepping inside. I could already tell the energy in the room was vibrant. Flipping through the pamphlet, I noted the bulletins: Jean Gebser, Krishnamurti, Aldous Huxley – names that were enough to get my attention. “it’s about to begin, shh!” A girl in a brown dress shouted to her friends, sitting down in a chair next to me. I had myself a seat and sat up straight. A little man in a suit walked out from the side of the auditorium, walking to the center of the room where there was a big white board. He adjusted his microphone and cleared his throat. “Afternoon folks, let’s begin.”
the character's reluctant curiosity is apparent but the information regarding the setting seems to be a little rushed. as far as an idea, it's an awesome concept but i think the setting should be developed more...some of the imagery is indecisive: "the room","a lady" these just some things to think about. i'm admittedly not a professional but i figured i give some of my two cents it's a very readable concept and i realize it's a new piece so sorry if i was a little critically overbearing or just misunderstood what you were trying to portray nice work
