Eternal Winter

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by AshtonsMom, Nov 14, 2005.

  1. AshtonsMom

    AshtonsMom Banned

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    The cold drifts through my
    open window,
    so I shut it.
    But the cold still manages
    to creep into my
    Cozy quarters and pervade
    My personal space
    With its stinging chill.
    I put on warmer clothes.
    It doesn't help.
    Nothing does.
    God, it's so cold in here.
    I see my breath
    fog up my mirror,
    and it reminds me that
    I need a cigarette.
    So I light one up.
    Since you've been gone,
    I've been so very cold, (always),
    But how can I escape
    From the clutches of this
    Eternal winter,
    When it's been
    This way since you've left?


    © Heather Bush
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    such raw emotional power, and of a familiar vein... I absolutely love the imagery and the intimate personality presented... it makes for one powerful piece. I've only recently escaped that winter.... it was an unbearably slow change, but so like the seasons; every day getting a little warmer till suddenly it's spring with the glimmer of possibilities :)
     
  3. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    A nice piece. Reminds me of where I was at a year ago and moments that peek through even now, but now they are only moments.
     
  4. AshtonsMom

    AshtonsMom Banned

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    thank you.
     
  5. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    I wasn't sure where you were going with it, but the ending was perfect. Nice job.
     
  6. AshtonsMom

    AshtonsMom Banned

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    Thank you again.
     
  7. Scarlit Rose Flowz

    Scarlit Rose Flowz Member

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    the cold rules the physical world,
    the material side of the coin that humanity embraces like an addiction,
    give it up and let it rule you,
    and it just might show you where you need to go
    to find warmth, and your love again
     
  8. make art not war

    make art not war Member

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    This is a wonderful poem. When I began to read it, I thought it was a piece only describing the climate, but I love how it quickly rolls into you describing how it feels without the warmth of your [boyfriend?, husband?]

    This is a great piece.
     
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