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  1. 52~unknown~52

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    he... or it came forth from the depths
    through the portal of despair
    bearing a small black box.
    tied up all pretty with a glossy black bow.
    you stand on the dilapitated front porch waiting.
    you don't know why. but you are waiting.
    you see it now,
    gliding through the murk, no effort
    it's swirling robe around it, the stench coming from it
    it makes your stomach clench
    but still you wait, staring, your face emotionless
    it approches...
    as it holds out the box with one skeletal hand,
    you can just barely make out the words "yours and yours alone, your life, summerized"
    so, you take the box.. and pull the bow
    you take a deep breath
    and open the lid
    there is absolutly nothing there
    you scream, and all goes dark.
     
  2. BraveSirRubin

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    "Empty" is a great way to describe your writing.
     
  3. 52~unknown~52

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    thank you, i appreciate your sincerity and would like to see you attempt any better.

    your just angry i told you you need a hug :rolleyes:
     
  4. BraveSirRubin

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    "You're".
     
  5. 52~unknown~52

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    thank you, but my comment still stands. :)
     
  6. BraveSirRubin

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    I'll write a poem just for you..

    But not now.
     
  7. 52~unknown~52

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    no thank you, any taunts, puns, analogys,or, put downs you want to say will only just hurt me in ways only some 22 year old who lives on the moon can... but i appreciate the sentament. :)
     
  8. BraveSirRubin

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    No analogies. Only oxymorons.
     
  9. 52~unknown~52

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    wt eva :rolleyes: lol :D
     
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