DREAM dollhouse, daffodils. naked kisses from electric lover in ciagrette city. highways flowers in secret wedding. oceans tears from my dry eyes sparkled yellow, flying chocolate, wild vanilla. holy beaches, holy kings!
Yes,...i have to agree with x-wax-x, i love it also. and it's very breath taking. your poetry is getting very deep. you are able to say so much with very few words. great job Cassi ! I will wait for your next one! p.s. 'flying chocolate' sounds like a great name for a band!
ahaha....yeah, a new band. maybe 'flying chocolate'? but i kind'a have my heart set on naming the band '240' though. BTW - did I tell you how the name came up? keep writing cazz, wanna hear what's in your head.
No, you never told me how the name came up...but maybe you will one day...? I'll post a new poem when something bright comes up again(if it ever will)...
I've been to Cigarette City. The Chocolate there only seems to fly. It actually just jumps: very, very high.
I really liked the imagery that came across with this one. Only constructive critism would be to ask if that should be a period instead of a comma after yellow or is it yellow flying choco, wild vanilla goodnesses? Is that one stream of conciousness? Really enjoyed the hell out of this one!!
*bluss* I really didn't expect so many nice words from all of you...thanks again, I feel the pressure when it comes to the next poem I'm going publish...
thanks you... I'll try to catch some magic from the fairies in my closet and then write a new magical poem... ~cassi~
